Your Loveme
Give me your input on this poem?
I hide secrets deep below my flesh
I CRAVE the PAIN
Hope just burys itself accepting death
Belief in me drips out my pours
Smiles slither out the door
Hate throws the keys into a mess
Pressure grows inside my head
Apathy works on a all day shift
loveme and hateme fight over my breaths
Wishes always blueprint my grave
Pain digs my hole night and day
Dreams give breath to all my hope
Emotions welcome all my guest.
Just because I write these poems doesnt make me emo..I just like the sound and taste of these kinds ..shit
Too much emotion in a poem…. is it just me or is that a highly contradictory sentence?
I like the way it reads kind of like a list, it emphasises that feeling of a building up of so many negative emotions.
I’m pretty sure you mean ‘pores’ not ‘pours’.
Very nicely done though. And by the way, I don’t usually write very dark/depressed type poems but I get really sick of people complaining poems are too emo too. It’s not like poems about bunnies and flowers are very often critically acclaimed. When I was taking poetry classes, out of all the poems I wrote there was one that some people would describe as ‘emo’ and my teacher gave it the best comments out of any poem from any poet the whole semester.
Go emo poetry.
PS. Don’t you dare rhyme it, or give it a story. It will ruin it.
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